— Part-time employment in one country 2010

—  The bar chart unfolds a clear comparison in part – time employment between males and females in 2010. In general, the difference between the two genders was noticeable; females had a higher number than males did among/across all age groups/all age brackets. For the people aged between 15 and 24, 30% of females had part – time employment, two times/two folds /double the corresponding figure of males, 15%.

—  For the people aged between 15 and 24, 30% of females had part – time employment, two times/two folds /double the corresponding figure of males, 15%.

—  With respect to the age group between 25 and 34, the difference diminished/minimized/reduced (18% and 14% respectively). Females between 35 and 44 years old had a dramatically higher figure of 26% than males, a mere 5%. Female part time employment remained relative constant, with a minimal/marginal fall from 26% to 24% between the age of 35 and 64. This was followed by a further fall to 15% for the people above/over 65.

—  The number of males, on the other hand, remained the same/constant/stable/steady at 5% across the age groups between 35 and 64, rising/increasing/climbing /growing to 15% for those above/over 65, at which point both genders share the equal rate.

 译文：

    此柱状图对2010年从事兼职工作的男性和女性比率进行了清晰的对比。总的来说，男女性从业兼职工作的比率反差剧烈，不同年龄层次的女性从业者数量明显多于男性。

在15-24岁年龄层次中，女性兼职工作者人数是相应的男性人数的2倍，占到了30%，而男性只占从业人数的15%。就25-24岁的年龄组来说，男女兼职工作者比例差异呈降低趋势，即女性18，男性14%。相对35-64岁的人群，女性兼职工作者比率持均衡变化，即从26%到24%。伴随人数比率持续下滑的则是65岁以上的年龄组，有15%的老人从事兼职工作。另一方面，35-64岁的男性从事兼职工作的比率却保持不变，即5%， 而65岁以上的男女从业人员比率增长到15个百分点，两组比率持平。

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The bar chart shows/unfolds compares/demonstrates/illustrates/displays/reveals the gap in part – time employment between males and females in 2010.

—  it is obvious that/it is evident that the difference between the two genders was great/significant 

—  the contrast is striking/stark/sharp.  

—   more females took part – time jobs than males did nearly in all age groups

—  females far exceeded/far outnumbered males in doing part –time jobs across nearly all age groups

—  For the people aged between 15 and 24, 30% of females had part – time employment, two folds /double the corresponding figure of males, 15%.

—  When it comes to /regarding the people aged 25 to 34, the figures differed/varied more considerably/significantly/ dramatically/drastically/strikingly/noticeably ( 18%  and 13%  respectively)

—  With respect to the age group between 25 and 34, the figures differed/varied/less considerably/significantly/ dramatically/drastically/strikingly/noticeably ( 18% and 13% respectively) /

—  The difference diminished/minimized/reduced (18% and 14% respectively)

—  ( the figures stood less sharp contrast )

—   ( there was a less significant difference between the two)

—  in the statistics of water consumption per person,

—  Females in age group of 35 to 44

—  Females between 35 and 44 years old had a dramatically higher figure of 26% than males, a mere 5%.

—  There was a slight drop/ fall /decrease/decline from 26% to 24% among the next three age groups, 35 to 44, 45 to 54, and 55 to 64, with 1% decrease each age group. This was followed by a further fall to 15% for the people above/over 65.

—  Female part time employment remained relative constant, with a minimal/marginal fall from 26% to 24% between the age of 35 and 64. This was followed by a further fall to 15% for the people above/over 65.

—  The number of female part time employment dropped steadily/ marginally/ slightly /by the smallest margin between the age of 35 and 64  from 26% to 24%, with 1% drop each age group. This was followed by a further fall to 15% for the people above/over 65.

—  The number of males, on the other hand, remained the same/constant/stable/steady at 5% across the age groups between 35 and 64. Then it rose/increased/climbed /grew to 15% for those above/over 65.